Fantasy-Story+Oliver


 * My fantasy-ideas**

Name: The distant house

One world. Characters: Billy Denton, he lives high up in the mountains in a little village, called Minot-Town. There is a distant house outside the village. All habitants in the village know this house but no one have been in the house, but Billy have always wanted to discover and explore this house, but when he get there he will get some surprises.

**The distant house**
The fire burned very well, in the old beautiful fireplace. It almost looked like it could burn forever. It had that typical orange-red beautiful colour with a small blue shine in the middle.

Billy Denton continued driving through the town in his grey bus. It used to be lots of people that gets on the bus in Minot-Town, so the bus is really pushed to the limit when driving through the steep cobblestone-roads. Soon Billy drives in to the town´s most western-point. It’s a remote little station and it’s very rare to see someone that gets on the bus here. But this time, it’s different. An old woman gets on, dressed in a red coat with a small black handbag. When she were about to pay, a disaster strikes. She falls and drops her identity-card. All passengers look up. Billy helps her up and he also take up her identity-card from the floor. He made a quick look at it, Mrs.Calahan, Billy thought that it was an unusual name. The next second the woman pays and she walks down the bus. She takes a seat at the back of the bus. The Friday went fast and Billy was now in his home. He was tired but he still wanted to do something. He went out on his wooden-terrace just outside his door and looked up. ’‘The distant house’’ catch’d his eye. A big beautiful house located at the very top of the mountain. No one have ever seen any person there. No cars, no bikes, nothing. The house has red wood-panels with big round windows and a mighty tower rising up in the sky. Suddenly, Billy saw that there is coming a dark smoke out of the chimney. ''What, if there is no one there, how could the fire light it self. There must be someone there'' Billy thought.

He went over to David. David is also a bus-driver in town, he is not as experienced as Billy but he is starting to learn. Billy opened the outdoor and he stepped in. They said hello to each-other and then Billy explained the situation about the house. - Okay, so you are going to explore the house? David asked. - Yes, and I thought to do it now. That was typical Billy. If he wanted to do something, he gets on with the task directly. David wasn't that kind of man, but when Billy started to walk David decided to go with him.

It was a long way to the house, but now they where outside Minot-Town on a narrow asphalt-road witch went up up almost all the time. Billy’s old bus wouldn't handle this, it’s engine was simply to weak. Lucky that there wasn't any stations up here, he thought. The steep roads made them very tired but when they saw the house coming closer they went more and more excited. Now they were very close to the house with just a few meters left, and soon they stood in front of the door with the whole mighty house rising up over them. It almost felt like they where intruders. And it came smoke out of the chimney, witch made them a bit nervous. - Oh, look! A name on the door! Calahan... - I recognise that name, wait! I saw a woman earlier this day that had the name Calahan, Billy said. - I think that I’ve also seen her, she is living side the remote little station I think, said David. Billy felt at the door-handle, it was open. He slowly but surely opened the squeaking door. They stepped in and looked around. It was a big living-room with wooden-panels and a big white fluffy carpet that almost covered the hole living-room-floor. In the middle it was a big brown armchair. And it was so high, you couldn't see the head of the person sitting in it. They where very curious, so therefore, they went to the armchair to look if some one was sitting there. The answer was no. In front of the armchair it was a big light-grey fireplace. And it was a burning fire in it. It had that strong orange-red colour. They also noticed that it was very quite. All you could hear was the wind passing by. Just when they where about to go in to the next room, they heard steeps. In less than a second David and Billy stood as still as they could, to hear the steeps which were coming closer. Maybe this wasn't a good idea, Billy thought. But he hadn’t time to think of that now, it was too late for that. They started go get really nervous and soon there stood an old man with a grey jacket in the corridor. He had short hair and a black cap. First he looked a bit confused but then he got really angry, and all David and Billy thought of was to run. - What do you think you guys are doing here?! The man screamed with a dark voice. The next second David and Billy ran. David ran out of the house as quickly as he could, and then he hide behind a bush fifty meters from the house. But not Billy, he had ran upstairs. The old man went to the out-door and closed it. He knew that Billy was somewhere in the house so he thought to search for him. He went upstairs and Billy heard heavy steps coming closer.

David looked out from the bush. He looked at the house. ’‘Where is Billy? This is not good’’ he thought. ’‘Wait, I have an idea’’! He ran back to Minot-Town. And it went very fast because it was downhill.

The old man was now upstairs, at the closet-department. He started to open the closet-doors. Shirts, jackets and all different kind of shoes was in it. He started to look down at all the shoes, if he didn’t recognise one pair, that pair must be Billy’s. Yes, that old man was smart. But with three doors left he still haven’t found Billy, and just when he where about to continue he heard three knocks on the out-door. The old man went downstairs and opened the door. Outside stood a woman. And in the background twenty meters away was David. - Hello, said the old man confused. - Hello, I recognise you, wait. It’s Quint, my brother. Soon Quint also remember and then the Calahan’s talked a bit to each other. Quint explained that he had no were to live, then he saw this distant house so he went here. - Why didn’t you come to me, I could have done something for you, said Quints sister. - Okay, said Quint sadly. Soon David joined them. And Billy heard them talking downstairs from his hiding-place so he changed shoes and joined them too. Quint was in choked because he had met his sister for the first time for five years, so when Billy came down Quint didn't react. - Have you met Mrs.Calahan before? Billy asked. - Yes, when I drove bus, and now when I was outside the house I ran as quickly as I could to her house which were side the remote little station and then we took her old little moped up again, said David. - Are you new in Minot-Town Mrs.Calahan? Billy said. - No, but I always take my moped to my work, but for a few days it was broken so therefore I toke the bus, said Sarah. - And Quint, they just wanted to explore the house, they where not thieves, okay Quint? Said Sarah to her brother. - Okay, said Quint. - But I don't think you can live here any more. The house is in very bad condition, so I can fix a home for the moment. - Thank you very much, Sarah. Said Quint to his sister. David and Billy started to walk home. - Where was your hiding-place in the house? David asked. - I was in the closet, but I had took of my own shoes and I put on one of Quints shoes. I went so long in to the closet as I could and I was holding my own shoes in my hands. Quint looked at all the shoes, so if he saw my shoes he had found me. That guy was smart, but I was smarter.

THE END

You express yourself very well in this story so it is easy to understand, which is good. You are using a very nice and good language so you always knows what is going on. One thing to think about next time is that sometimes when you write " Billy " you maybe could write he. Because we already know that the story is about Billy. But it was a very good story and I´m looking forward to hear the ending Edvin

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Cobblestone-Roads - Kullerstens Väg Terrace - Terrass Mighty - Ståtligt Chimney - Skorsten Intruders - Inkräktare Narrow - Liten, smal Habitants - Invånare Confused - Förvirrad Condition - Tillstånd Express - Uttryck

by Edvin