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 * Grading The Essays **

C You got a C on this text because it has some personal feelings and most of the sentences are good composed. It has good length and your vocabuilary is also good. Though some grammarmistakes acure, on the whole it is nice. To get a higher grade you should try to write more about E.T and his life, and also try to have some more own thoughts about him.
 * Text 1: **

C You got C on this text beacause it is easy to understand the story. Though It has some essentiell grammatical mistakes, it is nice. To get a higher grade you should write more about feelings and try more generally. Instead of just saying fact after fact, you can write some own feelings or thoughts and have those in beetween the facts for example. Try also to combine shorter and longer sentences, to get more variation in the text.
 * Text 2: **

E You got E because some words are not written right, it is quite short, and you do not explain a lot about ET. If you want to get a higher grade you have to try more and write a longer text, combining longer sentences with shorter sentences. Try to have some own thoughts eswell about E.T. You will also have to practice your grammar for a higher grade, for example: His head is bigger that a humans. Think really clear what word should be used in the sentence, in the example it should be than instead of that. Try harder and we believe that you can do much better and will get a higher grade. Try to have some own thoughts eswell to increase the quality of the text. Also think of when writing one fact, have all those facts about E.T himself in the same part of the text to get a better flow.
 * Text 3: **

D You got D because some words are not written right and sometimes it is not so continuous. To get a higher grade, you have to write longer sentences and combine them with shorter ones so that your text gets a better flow. Another thing you need, to get a higher grade, is to use more personal feelings, write what you think and believe, and combine them with the facts have, and you will get a much higher grade.
 * Text 4: **

B You use more complexed words and combine them in a good way. The sentences are good composed and long. You also combine shorter and longer sentences often, which increases the quality of the text. If you want to get A you should write a little bit longer, more about your feelings and what you think of E.T and his life.
 * Text 5: **

C The text is long but it is not so continuous. But you combine shorter with longer sentences, which is good. But you will have to work on your grammar, some mis-spelled words acure in the text, and try to use more words like when, so, which and so on. In that way you can assemble two sentences in to one and get a longer sentence which also is a thing that gives the text more variation. To get a higher grade you also need to write more about your own opinions about E.T.
 * Text 6: **


 * __Improving the lowest graded text__**


 * Text 3, the original **

E.T is a kind of person that could give his life for a plant. He have an oval head, very very long neck and big eyes. The extra teristrial is tall and he have brown skin. E.T owns a big spaceship that he flies with in the galaxy. His head is bigger that a humans.


 * The re-written one **

E.T is an alien with a good personality and his head is shaped like a heart with no forhead. He has really big blue eyes and he also has a very long neck. The skin is very wrinkly and slightly brown and his upper body is really long compared to his legs who are really short. Elliot, his best friend, is a human. E.T loves the nature and he would offer his own life to save a plant. The big spaceship he owns allows him to travel around in the galaxy.

I love this movie because I think that the outer space is cool and I really like aliens. The movie I think, is very good, especially because people and aliens are bonding together. Elliots family helps E.T to get back to home. Elliot always has to hide E.T from his family and the citizens. When E.T is happy his heart lights up and gets red. This is the best movie I’ve ever seen. I really recomend it to everyone.