Fantasy+Story+Isak+7B

 ==The Source of Freedom==

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An early spring morning I woke up with a strange thought "Something is going to happen." The weather was beautiful and the morning promised a perfect day. I was still in bed, enjoying the sun and fresh air. Suddenly, the phone rang. I picked it up, it was Dave. ======

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I hate going up on early mornings, i'm in a such bad mood in the morning, I said to myself. A few minutes later I had some breakfast, I fetched some butter and some juice from the fridge. I took the hot bread from the toaster, I spread some butter over my sandwich and enjoyed the cold orange juice. ====== I could heard my phone beep again, so I ran up to my bedroom and picked it up. It was a message from Dave, "Meet you at the gas station in 20 minutes, be there! /Dave". I took my clothes on and opened the door, I could feel how the fresh air going into me. I took a walk to the gas station, instead of taking the car because I wanted to enjoy the beautiful sun and the fresh air. Dave was in the gas station buying fishing rods with Walter. The slidedoors opened in front of me and I could smell the gas and I heard Dave and Walter have a converstation - What a nice day going fishing right? He said to Walter - Yeah but are we gonna fish all day? Walter Insisted. - Uhm, I guess. He replied. - Okay, but isn't it gonna be a bit boring then? I mean we could do some other stuff as well. Walter fired back at Dave. - Hi guys.. I interrupted their conversation. - Oh hi Taylor! Walter yelled at me. - We should really get going soon right? Dave said - Yeah sure, lets jump into the car. I told them. We took Dave's cadillac, and of course Dave drove the cadillac, because he thought if we drove it we would most certainly scratch the whole car. We were now heading out of the city into the woods, we took an little gravel shortcut and then we finally arrived. I wasn't sure how Dave knew the exact way to this place but I could bet he has been here before with his father and fishing in the river. Walter opened the trunk cover, there was a bag in there loaded with food and survival supplies. - Guys, I packed three bags with survival resources in case something happens, you never know what can happen in these kinda forrestes. Walter said to us with a scary voice. - Uh, lay it down Walter, its perfectly safe here, I replied to him. We took one bag per person stocked with resources, with food, water bottles, knifes and lighters etc. There was a really fantastic morning but something just felt wrong when Walter said that, it kind of scared me. Dave lead us down to the river, the water stream was really powerful. - Dont jump in the river, the water stream will drown you its too powerful. Dave said to us with a tiny voice. I should probably listen to him he knows this river best of us, but I agree the water current is very strong. Actually I had no idea where the river lead, it looks like it lead into an cavern opening but there was to much fog so I wasn't really sure. We walked to a place near the river where it was rocky, there we could put down our stuff. We even put up an tent in case it started raining. It was all quiet in the woods, no birds singing or anything. But it was for sure really nice. We sat down on a rock and threw the fishing line into the river. We sat there for about ten minutes and then Dave got his first fish, I looked at him with a smile, he smiled back. Dave's fish was pretty big. After another five minutes of waiting I could see how the fish bate went up and down and I pulled up the fishing line from the water and got my fish. Mine was a bit narrow in my opinion but I wasn't gonna eat it anyway, i'm not that type of a fish eater. Just then I heard a scream from Walter! I stood up, and saw Walter running to us. - Guys, Guys, you dont believe what I saw! He yelled at us. - What? I asked. - Yeah what's wrong Walter? Dave replied at the same time as me. - I saw something coming down the river, to us, I dont know what it was but it was for sure made out of wood. - Like a wooden boat? Dave said. - Yeah, maybe but it's coming to us so we'll see! He said with an terrible voice. I knew something was weird, I've never seen Walter this scared. As I looked far up to the river I saw it, a wooden boat traveling in slow direction to us. But the thing was where did it come from? No one was in the boat. Empty. Dave dropped his fishing rod on the ground, he was amazed while a bit scared. Now the boat was really near us, and suddenly it just stoped. Right in front of us. We just stood there, no words to say. - Holy jesus christ, is this a joke or what? Walter said. It felt like we were meant to jump in the boat, because it stopped right in front of us. I Knew I would never do this but, somehow I wanted to jump in the boat. - Walter and Dave, should we jump in it? I asked them both. - Where will it take us? i'm not going in that cave. Walter answered. - Thats for us to find out, I guess. Dave replied. The wooden boat still was there, even though the powerful current in the river was pushing it stood still. We packed our bags and jumped into the boat. - Everyone in? - Yeah, let's go! - This is a bad idea guys, bad idea. - Eh, come on what could be the worst that could happen. And the boat suddenly started to move slowly down the river, it was picking up speed the further we went. This is it, I thought. The fog slowly passed away and we went right into the cavern opening with full speed. The tunnel was made of stone, a old tunnel i'd say. I couldn't see much, it was too dark. The feeling when you're sitting in this boat is like sitting in a rollercoaster. I sat on the front seat, Walter in the middle and Dave in the back of the boat. The boat was slowing down, but that gave me an thought. If we headed here with full speed all the way, and we're now slowing down that might mean theres a waterfall. And there was for sure, a twenty feet high drop straight into a cavern lake. - Oh my god! Walter yelled. Will we survive this? I asked myself, or will we get crushed to death. - Jump out of the boat! Grab you're bags! Dave yelled. I took his orders and jumped out of the boat. - We will meet down there if we make it! I said with a high voice, it was really difficult to speak in this water current. We were on the edge of the cliff where the waterfall was. - JUMP! Dave yelled. And it all went black.


 * "Few minutes later..."**

I opened my eyes, and felt a searing pain in my chest. - Taylor you're okay! I heard someone say, I didn't know who though. - What happend? I asked with a strange voice. I couldn't explain my pain in my chest. - When we jumped down, we couldn't find you. Then we desided to go look after you underwater and we found you there, unconscious. We pulled you up, and as stupid as we are we didn't know what to do with you... Dave replied. I stood up on my feet again, and looked around. Walter sat on a stone, and Dave tried to call "991", he had no luck with that. - Unbelievable, no service. Dave yelled with a angry voice. - There's gotta be a way out of here, we should go look around. - Good idea Taylor, here grab some torches. Oh yeah, should we split up? I had to think of that one, what could be the best to do. I heard something weird while I was thinking. - What was that?! Dave yelled and jumped away from the stone he sat on. I noticed a dark shadow a few meters away, a very short shadow. Was it a human? what could it be. - What is that? I asked them. - I have no idea, but lets get closer to it or him, Whatever it is. Dave replied. - Never, i'm not going close that creature, i'll stay here and watch out bags. - Well okay then. I said to him. Me and Dave walked closer, and there it was. A green... something. What in the world was that. - Hello there. Dave asked the creature. - Shh quiet, I said with a angry voice and looked at him. He had something in his hands, a knife? or a spear. We stood still for a while and looked at him. - Y-y-you s-ss-hould not be h--h-here. Right then a army of them stepped along behind him, probably thousands of them, with green ears and spears in their hands. They said something I couldn't recongnize, maybe they had their own language. - D-d-die. The troll said. - Taylor, we should go now. - No, we should RUN! I yelled as I was sprinting the fastest I could. - Walter run, run! Dave screamed. I tried to look behind me, so many of them. At that moment they started to throw their spears at us. They were so fast but still so small, and why would they just attack us like that? We didn't harm them or anything. I asked myself while sprinting for my life. We ran in small caverns, but it was difficult to run. It was very rocky. Suddenly I heard a scream. - Ah my leg. I turned my head to the left and saw Dave got an little spear in his leg, it was disgusting to look at. I was starting to get tired after running this fast and this long. But I saw something shine in the distance. - What's that in the distance? I asked them. - I do not know, but lets sprint the last to it and see what happens. Walter said. Once again I heard a scream, from Dave. I turned my head to the left again and saw Dave with his pain in the leg, I wasn't paying attention to where I was running and suddenly fell. I fell on a rock, I took a look around, the creatures where closing up on me, and Dave and Walter ran for their life. I thought for a second "This is my last chance to do something before I die" When I heard, - GUYS! I found a lever Walter screamed. - Pull it god damnit! I yelled. And I noticed rocks were falling from the sealing and crushed the creatures. Green blood splattered in my face, I wiped it off. And it was over. No green creatures in sight, I looked around and saw Dave and Walter running towards me. - We're sorry that we ran away from you, we're really sorry. Dave said to me with a terrifying voice. - No no, it is alright. You saved my life. They pulled me on my feet again, and we walked slowly forward. - Yeah when I pulled that lever it seemed to kill all the green scary things, but one more thing I noticed was something shining in the wall over there. Walter explained to me as we helped Dave. Dave were injured badly. We finally arrived to the wall. The wall had a blue and shiny pattern on it, like a X. I stretched my arms out to touch it, and a big door opened in front of us. We walked in, it looked like a old temple. As we moved along we saw a circle. - Wait wait. I know that thing, I've read that in my studie books, Erhm guys that might be a portal. - A portal? I asked. - Yeah a portal, it takes you to an other dimension. Like in the movies you know. - Where will it take us? - That's for us to find out. I found these useful 10 word in your story! /Gustaf 1.Lever-Spak 2.Portal-Portal 3.Dimension-Dimension 4.Disgusting-Äckligt 5.Strange-Konstig 6.Enjoying-Njuter 7.Splattered-Stänkte ner 8.Along-Längs 9.Suddenly-Plötsigt 10.Language-Språk

I think that this story is very interesting. You wrote extremely good!. But your chat dialog was a little bit unclear. And I really think that you could do better on the chat dialog.

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// Alex